Chiara's Cool Coast

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100wc “The cloaked Man”

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He’s always somewhere,

lurking,

ready to strike.

 

He’s always striking,

people,

at a bad time.

 

He’s painful,

hurting,

in the worst way.

 

He’s unfair,

mean,

but he comes anyway.

 

He’s a shock,

but,

sometimes he’s not.

 

He gives clues,

and,

they can be hard.

 

He’s dreaded,

loathed,

for a good reason.

 

He’s feared,

by,

those who can care.

 

He’s sneaky,

camouflaged,

you’ll never see him.

 

He comes,

and,

annoys forever more.

 

He’s confident,

clearly,

always has his way.

 

He hits,

harder,

than you expect.

 

He’s a mystery,

but,

you still know him.

 

His name,

is,

Death.

 

4 Comments

  1. I like that you have use a poem, I know that it can be quite challenging to write poems. It is probably a lot harder than writing usual text, I think next time you write a poem- think about not using one word for a line.
    Longer lines would make your poem more descriptive and meaningful.
    Nonetheless, good attempt and I really enjoyed reading your work.

  2. Wow amazing poem Chiara, I love all of the descriptive language. You are a very imaginative writer, keep up all of your amazing work!

  3. Wow, Chiara!
    This is a brilliant response to the prompt.

    I love the way you have laid it out as it makes it even more chilling than just reading the words in a piece. As for the words, well you have chosen well and that last line…! Wow!

  4. Chiara,
    I’ve got to say I disagree entirely with the comment from Molly. I feel you have quite consciously created a stilted jagged rhythm by choosing to have 3 line stanzas with 1 word as the centrepiece. It highlights the central theme of each stanza and builds your mood- I love it
    Ant

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